Camp Concert
Camp Concert I was tired and just wanted to get to bed but we just had to do this one thing,
my legs were shaking and butterflies appeared in my tummy I was so nervous for the camp concert.
Me and Lauren were going to be singing Castle On The Hill by Ed Sheeran.
we were waiting for our names to be called and after awhile we were called up for the second performance,
Me and Lauren stood up in front of the whole senior school and the adults and started to sing we sang together for the first part and then I sang the end then Lauren was meant to sing another part but the audience started to clap so we went and sat down.
I enjoyed watching Lauren’s face turn as bright and as red as a tomato when she wasn’t able to sing her part of the song and I also enjoyed all the other acts the winner of the concert was Jamie she sang hallelujah .
(WALT : write a descriptive recount about seniour camp)
Hi Shelby,
ReplyDeleteI loved how you explained the feeling you had when we were about to get called up! It was very descriptive. Maybe you could add a bit more comers or semicolons so that the reader can take a breath. In conclusion great piece of writing and I hope to read more from you!
- Lauren from Room 8
Heyy Loz,
DeleteThank you for the feedback I will keep that in mind I loved your waterslide poem by the way
- Shelby
Ok thanks Shelby, Have a great day!
DeleteThanks Lauren you too,
DeleteShelby